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Esmeralda (Done!!)

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Post by The Good Fri Jun 26, 2015 4:44 pm

Esmeralda (Done!!) The_enchantress_by_a_2_k-d8iyqu5
Race: (fairy, mermaid, vampire ect.) Enchantress
Name: Esmeralda Germ
Gender: Female
Physical Age: 22
Height: 5'11
Hair: Long blonde hair
Eyes: Green
General Appearance: Pitcure
Trade:(if applicable) Wretch by day,
Residing Kingdom:  Grinnich
Parents/Creator:(if applicable)
Mother- Margret
Father- Charles  
Siblings:(if applicable) A little brother named Tenner. He lives with her parents
Pet(s): A white cat named Nix
Personality: Esmeralda is a flirtatious, confidant enchantress who loves her job as well as flirting with her customers. She can be manipulative to get what she wants and not afraid to go and get it. She also tends to be sweet to children and the elderly
Flaws:
Power(s): (if applicable)The magics that Esmeralda wields is stronger than some. She has the ability to create illusions that can deceive all of the senses including touch. She can create green fireballs that she sends flying at her enemies. In mirrors and surfaces of water, she can see anyone she wants to see and what they are doing. She can also control objects with her mind.

History: Esmeralda was born to a human father and a witch mother.  She lived in the Kingdom of Grinnich her entire life and practice magic with the help of her mother. Esmeralda was a fast learner and earned the title of enchantress on her eighteenth birthday.
RP Example: Esmeralda walked through the town toward the village. She had to get some things for her home. Grabbing a basket, she bought three apples, two ginger roots, and a pound of dough from three different stands at the same time. Her illusions were getting stronger. The other two illusions of her walked on either side of her, smiling as people backed away from her and marveled.

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Post by Iris Mon Jun 29, 2015 12:00 am

-a witch is not a mythical creature and since you didn't buy a special character yet I'm afraid you cannot have an enchantress.
-those powers are bother over powered and need more detail, please change.
-for a trade you didn't put a 'by night' job. Please out one of just make her a wrench
-a LOT more detail needs to be added to the history
-you completely left the flaws section blank, please fix
-one more trait needs to be added to personality
-alter the RP example once you fix the whole witch thing.


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